I think you did very well within the context of a short film, with this. Nice, unhurried-looking takes.Quite downplayed, quite low-key. Nice naturalistic feel to it. Nice flow, or movement. Very nicely shot - very nice look it has to it. Quite like European cinema in its look and feel and flow and even, to some extent, in its subject matter. Nice-looking actors and actresses - so that you don't mind the camera lingering on them in - for a short film - quite lengthy takes while you (the audience) consider their features. Very well done. I was very impressed with what you did with this, and just as impressed with the way that you did it.
I liked the meandering pace. It reminded me of why I liked Gus van Sandt's film elephant - very, very long takes and very little dialogue. Which leaves you free to consider - and to discuss - the film and what the filmaker is actually doing whilst you are watching the thing itself. It was in this way that I discovered - or, more accurately, had pointed out to me - the influence of Kubrick upon Van Sandt. It's worth bearing in mind. One doesn't always wish to be pinioned to the back of one's seat by rapid edits and incessant noise - without being given the time, the space or the chance to actually consider what it is you are watching.
Forgive the second bite, but I did want to say that to you.